How are my RPs?

[kvhelden]

Be as blunt and as honest as you can. It's been a while, new character, new fed. I wanna learn as much as possible. So tell me whatever you think.

[sidbiafra]

You asked for honesty so here it is. I personally found the ones i saw to be rather short and rushed. Seemed like you didnt put much effort into them. I'm not trying to be and (BLEEP) its just what i saw. Also remember to set up your scene more. Say more about your opponents, and less about your self, and made through some html in there to make it more exciting to read.

[Stylin' Kyle Roberts [REBEL]]

I like the character of Van Helden. And I preferred the first promo (the cup) to the second promo, simply because the formatting of the first one made it flow better. The italic tags definitely help differentiate between Karl's monologue and the actions and descriptions.

So, really, you've got a pretty strong handle on the character from what I can see so far.

I'm not sure if I agree with Sid about focusing on your opponents instead of yourself. Part of your character seems to be arrogance, and it fits the character to talk about himself a lot.

When it comes to Kyle Roberts and Bruce Richards, my partner and I write them as having disdain for easily three quarters of the roster. And sure, we talk ourselves up a lot. Because D-X is that arrogant. But Kyle's the kind of guy who takes potshots at his opponents to mock and belittle them as well. So it's a matter of finding the right balance, I suppose.

So far, I'm liking Karl Van Helden as the heel he is. Once you get a hold of your voice and the formatting, I see no immediate problems.

[Ryan Ro [NAPW]]

Speaking of HTML, RED! Blinding me! Ahhhhh!